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shuning
Posts: 371
Joined: 08-10-06 Sun 1:37 pm
Location: Kulai, Johor

望着你的离去
泪水掉了下来
手中依然握着
那思念的枫叶
蓝枫叶
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Kathy Teng
Posts: 107
Joined: 25-09-06 Mon 5:14 pm
Location: Sabah

一点都不像诗嘛~~~ :?
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蓝天的思念
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Location: Kuantan
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Kathy Teng wrote:一点都不像诗嘛~~~ :?
什么不像诗??
只是她的诗感觉上像唐诗般有规律...
蓝天里,有我的思念.
白云中,有我的关怀.
心里,有我
最真诚的祝福与微笑.
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容淑维
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是有点短，但却满满的思念。
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shuning
Posts: 371
Joined: 08-10-06 Sun 1:37 pm
Location: Kulai, Johor

谢谢 :!: 哈哈，那到底像不像诗呢 :?:
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容淑维
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说像它倒很像...
总之最重要要表达的东西都呈现出来啦！ :)
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Kathy Teng
Posts: 107
Joined: 25-09-06 Mon 5:14 pm
Location: Sabah

mana像诗!?
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